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@Faris

Nice writing! One thing only: I don't think "persecution" is the right word. It doesn't mean the same as it does in Spanish. "Persecution" brings to mind some sort of government oppression or harassment. Maybe "pursuit" or "chase" would fit better here?

@Hikari_undomiel

She was not able to close their eyes => "close HER eyes". There are a few others with the same mistake:
She caressed her face => I assume she is caressing HIS face (?)
she decided to close their eyes => HER eyes

His head was lying on the wheel => "His head was RESTING on the wheel". Lying implies being in a horizontal position and it refers to the whole body, not just an arm or a head.

The last sentence is a bit awkward or confusing at first, but OK, the meaning is clear and it is grammatically correct.

Other than that, very good!
 

Any volunteers to finish the story? Since I wrote the last part, someone else should write the conclusion.
 

Thank you very much for your comments, Tingwe! What a bunch of basic mistakes, I hope I’ll do better in the next task ! ^^U

This week has been quite busy, so I am afraid I won’t be able to conclude the story, I am sorry! 

I have an idea that might just work. I´ll try finishing it after breakfast.

Yep Leonid, it worked for me at least :) Very nice, and I think it wraps up the "Exquisite Corpse" nicely.

Fun exercise, I'm pleased to see the result actually.

Thank you for participating and commenting, I'll leave this scene open for further feedback but close the actual task scene.